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In many cities, there is little control on the design and construction of new houses. Some people think that people can choose to build houses in their own style as the old house style in local areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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In many cities, there is little control
on
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 the design and construction of new houses. Some
people
 think that
people
 can choose to build houses in their own
style
 as the old
house
style
 in local areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. There is no strict control over the design and construction of the new
buildings
 in certain cities. So, many
people
 believe that they can build their
house
 by design and decorating between the old
house
style
 in local areas. In my opinion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
First
, building the new building can inject new energy into the local area. The owner has the right to build the
house
 in their way, and we can not stop them to built a
house
 as same as the other
house
next
 to them. The creativity and innovation of architecture are popular trends, and the public is looking forward to seeing some unique designs from the past. A city with a different
house
style
 can give a diverse impression to other
people
 from different countries. The government is open-minded to allow to have the different
buildings
.
Moreover
, those
buildings
 maybe
be
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 the following famous attraction in the future, or the picture will show in the travel magazine or blogger.
Then
, it will bring positive affection to the local travel industry. Perhaps some
people
 might think it is hard to keep the city look tidy and clean with
buildings
 with different designs.
Also
, it doesn't seem easy to check their construction quality if the government does not have control.
However
, if all the
buildings
 look the same, they will lose their special. When all the houses have the same shape, colour, and structure, they will look tidy and lose their feature. In summary, I believe each building should have a story behind it.
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