Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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While some people argue that additional activities

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classes

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as charity, neighbourhood improvement, or appreciation must be a mandatory part of the high school programme, others disagree with

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statement. I tend to agree with the

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I will discuss why I agree with

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statement. I believe that school is not just about learning science lessons. In my opinion, schools should not only teach lessons in math, physics, etc., but schools

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need to teach

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skills.

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, "Relationship between parents and children", "Respect for the elderly", "How can addiction destroy your

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?" or something like that.

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, I think

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will be helpful for students going through puberty. The

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reason why it is very important is to correct students' worldview and behaviour. Some students are given the wrong direction for their

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by their parents or peers.

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, the wrong direction of religion or addiction.

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, nowadays some teenagers suffer from depression. In the

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ten years, the suicide rate among teenagers has increased a lot. In my opinion,

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is because many teenagers do not have a comprehensive worldview and are not satisfied with what they already have. The extra classes can show poor countries and people that they have everything they need and that they have a better

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. These solutions can lead to good deeds. In conclusion, tutoring is a very important part of the education system today. In some parts of the world, tutoring overtakes some classes by its benefits.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

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254 words

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