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Personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organisations. Do you think the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

#information #individuals #internet #companies #organisations #situation
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In
this
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 modern world, our daily lives heavily rely on the services of large
companies
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such
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 as GAFA: google, amazon, Facebook, apple. Many
people
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 take it for granted , while others started to be
concern
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 about the negative impacts of technology. In my opinion,
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 trend is more harmful than beneficial to both society and individuals. It is true that their services are convenient from several aspects.
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 of all,
companies
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 that record
people
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 shopping history or past text messages can find expected criminals in advance. In fact, some uprisings were successfully constraint due to the swift response toward overshadowing messages.
In addition
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,
people
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 can save time and resources, by giving personal
information
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 including bank account numbers, birth date, personal tastes.
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, the Google search engine remembers users' tastes and show collected
information
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 according to anticipation(premise).
On the other hand
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, there are significant drawbacks. Some
companies
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 may utilize social power only for their profit.
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, Facebook is criticized for the arbitrary manipulation of
information
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 during the U.S. election period. What is worse, flaws in data security may cause serious damage to
people
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's social image. In fact, there are some celebrities who killed themselves after the private messages are accidentally exposed to the public. In conclusion, global
companies
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 which accumulate personal
information
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 have
positive
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a positive
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 and negative
influence
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influences
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 on both society and individuals. Considering recent sad news related
with
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to
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 big
information
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companies
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, I strongly believe that the disadvantages should not be underestimated and
further
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 actions of regulations will be longed for.
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