Personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organisations. Do you think the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

In
this
modern world, our daily lives heavily rely on the services of large
companies
such
as GAFA: google, amazon, Facebook, apple. Many
people
take it for granted , while others started to be
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about the negative impacts of technology. In my opinion,
this
trend is more harmful than beneficial to both society and individuals. It is true that their services are convenient from several aspects.
First
of all,
companies
that record
people
shopping history or past text messages can find expected criminals in advance. In fact, some uprisings were successfully constraint due to the swift response toward overshadowing messages.
In addition
,
people
can save time and resources, by giving personal
information
including bank account numbers, birth date, personal tastes.
For example
, the Google search engine remembers users' tastes and show collected
information
according to anticipation(premise).
On the other hand
, there are significant drawbacks. Some
companies
may utilize social power only for their profit.
For instance
, Facebook is criticized for the arbitrary manipulation of
information
during the U.S. election period. What is worse, flaws in data security may cause serious damage to
people
's social image. In fact, there are some celebrities who killed themselves after the private messages are accidentally exposed to the public. In conclusion, global
companies
which accumulate personal
information
have
positive
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and negative
influence
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on both society and individuals. Considering recent sad news related
with
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big
information
companies
, I strongly believe that the disadvantages should not be underestimated and
further
actions of regulations will be longed for.
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