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Many claims that the fast-food industry had a negative effect on environment, eating habits and families. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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It is generally said that in the modern world, the influence of fast food is continually increasing.
Although
 some health organizations try to solve
this
 problem, the effects of fast feed could be from results health issues, environmental problems, and other cons in a long term. In my opinion, I will completely agree with the point.
To begin
 with, fast foodstuff craving pushes the population to get enjoyment, because with the daily hectic schedule sometimes life become pressurized, so the crowd spend time with their companions and family members along with a delicious heavy meal.
For instance
, royal families celebrate their special days with wine and heavy stuff.
In addition
, homemade food adds regular ingredients that reduce the taste as well as hunger pangs.
Hence
, the community prefer to fry meal rather than homemade cuisine.
On the contrary
 side, heavy meal contents have numerous deleterious effects not merely for human beings but
also
 on the environment. As most of the persons who consume heavy fare on regular basis directly affect their gastric tract,
therefore
 family have to face problems like a gastric problem. Peptic ulcers,
for example
, has become very common in developed countries, where priority is given to heavily loaded burgers with different flavoured sauces ,
Moreover
 industries throw waste material openly, which
further
 causes more flees and mosquitos that are directly or indirectly affects the environment. In conclusion, while fast cooking gives a delicious taste, I assume that its detrimental effects could not be ignored.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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