You have learned that a financial organisation in your city gives money as a loan to students who like to take a part-time course. You are interested to do the course and have decided to take a loan. Write a letter to a local financial organisation. In your letter, • give your qualifications and work experience • give details about the course • explain how this course will help you

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Dear Mr James, I am writing to inform you that I am interested in the part-time course as advertised by your financial organisation.

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, I have decided to take a loan

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associated with the students that will be partaking in the study. I have a BSc. from the University of Ibadan and I have five years of working experience as a relationship coach.

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, I have 2 years of working experience as a Customer Service Manager at Hilton restaurant.

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, the course is a one-year program that will be held at the city hall, and the classes will be

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every day from 4pm till 6pm in the evening. It will be a blend of virtual and online teaching.

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, lectures on Saturday and Sunday will be starting by 9am in the morning and it will end by 6pm in the evening.

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program will be of great benefit to me.

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, it will help me to master the current project I am working on right now,

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it will boost my confidence in handling high-level tasks in my office. I do hope I will be considered for

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loan, than you for your time. Yours Sincerely, Rotimi

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