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Nowadays people make new friends through social networks and internet chat groups. Some people think that is good. Others think that face-to-face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give our opinion.

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Social networking
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 are becoming popular these days to make
friends
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.Some are of the opinion that
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sites
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 are a great way to know different cultures and traditions of other societies ,whereas others think that physical friendship is a safer option in today's unpredictable world filled with dangerous
people
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.In my opinion,relying on
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sites
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 has increased the crime rate globally and should be avoided at all costs.
This
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 chat groups to make new
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. On one hand,advanced technology has led to
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 in social networking
sites
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 like Facebook and Instagram,where
people
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 around the world are connected at a click of a button.
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,these
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 promote friendship among strangers,who are completely clueless about each other and they often fall into the traps of criminals.
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, according to a survey,young girls ran away from their houses with the
friends
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 they made on a friendship site and were later found abandoned in other areas.
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 is the reason why it is important to avoid making
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 without seeing them or knowing their background.
On the other hand
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,global acquaintances
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 the door for cultural diversity.It is a good way to learn different interesting customs and traditions.
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,Korean culture has spread to all parts of the world only through these social
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, Facebook pages liked by millions of
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.Learning something different about other nations local culture is possible when local
people
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 meet each other. To conclude,
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 social
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 are great ways of learning about other nations;
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,the risk of meeting unknown and dangerous
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 are more.In my opinion,it is best to avoid
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sites
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 and make physical
friends
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.
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