Crime appears to be rising in most countries in the world, especially among young people. Identify the possible causes of this trend, and propose some solutions you think would be effective.

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activity rate is going up amongst youngsters, where numerous provokers for doing
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appear to be focused on three areas, and a number of
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appear to be possible. One of the
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social networks
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, there was a virus challenge to do minor crimes in hypermarkets, and record video how policy is catching an offender.
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appeared to be global, with the result that innocent young victims of hypnosis from being popular by performing “challenge” lead to destroy their bright future with
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record in their history of living.
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, another issue is that
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of pupils reached its absurd peak. A great example is videos from school’s security cameras on how students
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teachers and are not respecting them. As a consequence of new rules, teachers cannot defend themselves in old manners, as minors right above major’s
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law badly used by some individuals. Regarding potential
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, probably the main remedy would be strict control for social network contents, especially where there are instructions to act against the law. To illustrate, governments all over the
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banned videos
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Instagram, where authors
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were breached, so it is not simple to use Ed Sheeran’s songs on
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any video.
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to respect authors right and start to behave
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laws.
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, another possible remedy may be proper agitations for parents to educate their children to respect others. In
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where people respect each other,
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and polite,
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rate tends to be minimal. Even more, children
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the behave of elders, which would be a great gear to change a relationship to criminal performances. To conclude, it is evident that there
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of children crimes, but all the
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have
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and alternatives
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