celebrities are more famous for glamour and wealth than their achievements, is this trend setting bad example? do you agree or disagree?

The importance of being famous not because of glamour which was always debatable has become more controversial with many people have claimed that it is beneficial while others rejecting
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notion. The substantial influence of
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elaborate my views with non favouring the positive impact of well-known by beauty and money and
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will lead to a logical conclusion. To commence with, the
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and foremost reason is spreading or projecting them that can cause over the
next
generation as the severe impact in society. Every culture will be ravaged so easily because of these actors and their attractions influence on entertaining shows.
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habitual inferior of their charisma can cause only illuminate
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to think about money earning
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any medium or portal.
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, if the perverse young man did not achieve anything at present which create crisis among the folk lead to
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of them, make entire world would be changed and never admire to erratic prestige. Probing ahead, the main underlying reason behind pursuing any good intentions make you achieve guidance of them correlated to the achievements of celebrities and sticking with harmony can retrieve them from bad intentions. It is
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guidance, dedicated, and perfectional
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make a good example for them. Loyal between public make good relation and nowadays celebrities are famous due to their achievements and
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, derive about an expedition of the family in clear the way of concentrate development in themselves. To
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, according to the arguments aforementioned above, completely, I agree with that because their development is only based on their achievement.
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with a dedicative mind can achieve anything in life it empowers the stabilize of human instinct.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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