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In recent years a large number of highly skilled professionals like doctors, engineers and IT professionals from poorer countries are migrating to developed countries for better-paying jobs. What are the possible problems of this and what solutions can you suggest to deal with this issue?

#years #professionals #doctors #engineers #countries #jobs
In today's time some of the developing or the poorer
countries
 are producing
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 number of medical and engineering graduates every year and due to lack of government jobs, bad infrastructure and poor salary structure, the large number of highly skilled
professionals
 like doctors , engineers and IT
professionals
 indirectly forced to
migrating
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 to developed
countries
 for
better paying
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better-paying
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 jobs and attractive incentives
offerred
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offered
 by the companies. Which
indeed
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 a big reason
of
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 having brain drain in the poorer
countries
. No
doubts
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, that the developed
countries
 are giving employment to many skilled
professionals
 in the developing
countries
 by outsourcing their work and helping developing and poorer
countries
 to improve their economy and
also
 encouraging more and more
younsters
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youngsters
 to go for professional courses like
Phd
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PhD
 , Mtech, BE, Btech etc and helping poorer
countries
 to have good exposure. But, I see
lot
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 of brain drain
also
 because of highly paid skilled jobs outside the poorer
countries
. The
professionals
 helping developed
countries
 to innovate and grow even better
,
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 can do
lot
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a lot
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 in their
countries
itself
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themselves
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,
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 if they are
offerred
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offered
good
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a good
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 salary and incentives and
also
 the
infrastarture
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infrastructure
 which can help them to innovate. In my understanding, If
government
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 can provide
good
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a good
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 budget to
setup
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set up
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world class
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world-class
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 infrastructures
to
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for IT companies ,hospitals and if they can give attractive pay scale to skilled
professionals
,
then
 the poorer
countries
 will have less brain drain to happen and the innovation that skilled
professionals
 do outside the
countries
 can do within the
countries
 for their betterment. Skilled
professionals
 can help their
countries
 to improve
economy
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their economy
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 and can help the
countries
 to be
a
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developed country.
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