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Some people believe that men and women are equal and so women should be able to do any job they want. Others feel that men and women are not equal and therefore there are certain jobs which are not suitable for women. What is your opinion

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Living in an egalitarian society, some argue that equality is important and that
women
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 should do
jobs
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 according to their preferences.
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, others maintain that not all the
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 are suitable for
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, there are must some works have to be done by men. In my opinion, I agree with the
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 statement and think that they still can do an excellent job in every kind of work content.
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 of all,
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 should be able to choose
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 according to their personal willingness due to equality.
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 is reasonable, and there are
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 manifold
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 that are gender-irrelevant.
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, library work does not require a librarian who is strong enough to lift books or
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categorize them.
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, as long as a woman can pass police examinations, she is still qualified to fight crime or maintain social safety.
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, once
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 consider themselves are affordable and competent to do their work, there is no
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 concern about it.
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, it is undeniable that some
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 are stronger than men. Due to
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 fact, drawbacks
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brought by the difference in body shape between genders will be naturally eliminated.
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, athletes who are able to participate in weightlifting in Olympics can undoubtedly move bricks in a construction site.
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 there is a traditional concept around men that females are weaker than males.
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,
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 myth can be easily overthrown by the example aforementioned. In conclusion, while it is true that female
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 are less powerful than male
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 due to physical differences, they still can do any
jobs
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 once they believe they can take the job. In my opinion, in a gender-equal society
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 should respect other
people
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's willingness and decisions.
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