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Some people think that cities are the best places to live. Others prefer to live in a rural area. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are a lot of differences between the
city
 and the countryside. It is an enormous decision when
people
 need to decide where they live in the future. In the following, I would like to discuss the pros and cons of living in
cities
 or rural
area
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areas
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. In the end, I will express my viewpoints with
this
 statement.
First
, there are many advantages for
people
 who live in
cities
. They can enjoy more convenience than
people
 who live in rural areas. The
city
 is
a
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the
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center
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centre
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 of the country that means the government have been invested a majority of resources and money into it.
For example
 the transportation system, building quality, medical service, and education system etc. So,
people
 who live in the
city
 can enjoy more government benefits and resources. Resident in the
city
 is easier and quicker to travel around because the
city
 is an important spot to link with other
cities
 or countries. They have more public transportation
such
 as bus, train, metro, the airport that can help to get to the destination directly.
Moreover
, there are more entertainment places for
people
 in their spare time,
such
 as cinemas, department stores and restaurants that provide more choices to customers. Living in the
city
 has more chances to hang out with your friends and colleagues after school or work to maintain the relationship.
However
, if
people
 need in rural areas, they can enjoy the fresh air without many chemical pollutants. They can have more space in their room and pay lesser rental fees than in
cities
.
Also
, the cost of living is cheaper than in the downtown. In my opinion, as a teenager, I
prefer
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live
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 in the
city
. The
first
 reason is I can have a better job opportunity because the majority of the company would only set up their office in the
city
. Living in the
city
 can easier to find a job and connect with other
people
.
Last
 but not least, it is easier for me to get everything I need than can focus on my work within a short time.
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