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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway line for very fast trains between cities. Other believes the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give you own opinion

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In today's world, public
transportation
 plays a significant role in people's lives whether it is rail
transit
 or bus
transportation
.
This
 essay will augment my views on both cases. Constructing new fast railway lines for interconnecting cities can be really helpful for office going young generation as they have to spend less time in commuting from home to workplace.
Also
, spending a huge amount of money to build better railway tracks can save huge time and hassle for workers. Adding, fast trains can give one comfort and ease for travelling. Overall, building a new fast
train
 track leads to more aesthetic infrastructure and counts as a developed city.
For example
, researchers said that employees who commute by fast
train
 can get less likely to be annoying and they are energetic and more productive compared to others who commuted by another mode of
transportation
.
On the other hand
, improving existing public transport is
also
 essential as they already wear out and old and damaged vehicles are more likely to use fuel.
Thus
, replacing existing vehicles with newer vehicles can save a generous amount of fuel, money and possibilities of any accidents. In adding to that public get a proper new vehicle to travel and make their journey smooth and hustle-less.
For instance
, a survey shows the replaced public
transit
 is air pollution free and uses less fuel compared to the older and tore out public
transportation
. To conclude, in my opinion, replacing older public transport modes with newer, fresh and updated public
transit
 is as essential as constructing new fast
train
 tracks.
However
, upgrading existing public
transit
 is easier and more helpful for each and every citizen as not everyone could afford new fast
train
's tickets.
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