Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals suggest that social welfare supposed to be an optional part of

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life.

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services

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as charity, volunteering and improvement of the environment have to be added to the practical course at the school. In my opinion, I completely agree with the statement and

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I will give some own reasons to explain that. On one hand, from the economic perspective, the level of social involvement is going to

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increase

if children will take a part in different charity events organized by the government. Kids have to learn the other people's

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and share their own.

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, these

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might help them to

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adapt

to the future life and help to become a good person.

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, there are a lot of programmes in Germany for

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teenagers, which aim is to provide needed supplements and food for poor families. So, every student can bring their own product or collect it from the company, and send it to these people.

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projects save governmental money and could be spent on educational scholarships, renovation of the schools and

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reconstruction

of playgrounds for children.

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this

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budget might be

transfered

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transferred

to the medical institutions and health care

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, Kazan Federal University has a volunteer

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, every student can join it. Every week participants visit animal shelters, go to the

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elderlies

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and clean their houses, provide food. Once

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a month

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group

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prepare a performance and present it to the kids from the foster houses,

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, they bring toys and clothes with them. In conclusion, public

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have to be a significant part of

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life, because

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encourage children to help others and build their character.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Varied vocabulary

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