Some people say that it is best to accept bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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For some people, accepting an unliked work,
deficit
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of money or other bad situation is seen as the best solution, while others are convinced that everything must be done to try and improve it. I believe that being satisfied and
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our
life
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we need to try
por
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for
best to improve bad situations. On the one hand, accepting bad situations that make our
life
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worser
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worse
and more difficult, can train our willpower and patience, which in time will make a person stronger.
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, not all people,
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can keep from breaking down in the face of
life
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's difficulties. Accepting a negative situation for what it is can lead to psychological trauma and problems,
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example
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depression. As an example, job dissatisfaction can lead to the following consequences: emotional exhaustion, work dissatisfaction and a consequent decline in performance, which can lead to even more problems.
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why I think it's worth fixing what doesn't satisfy a person. Trying to improve
bad
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the bad
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situation
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is the right way to make our
life
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happier. When we fight the circumstances, we know that we do our best. Of course, it is a big stress for
person
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a person
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, but the result will be satisfying.
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, the English teacher, Tatiana Bakalchuk, from
Moscow
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region has become the richest woman in Russia. Because of the teacher’s small salary, she did not have enough money, and she decided to change her
life
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. Not having a particularly large start-up capital, she opened her own business, thereby becoming a rich entrepreneur. The desire to change things in
life
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can lead to success, so it is always worth trying. In conclusion, I would like to say that in my
opinion
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it is always worth trying to change bad situations in your
life
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. Of course, everyone can deal with negativity to the best of their ability, but you should never sit and accept everything
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happen
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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