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In many places, people's lifestyle is changing rapidly and this affects family relationships. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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The fact that people’s lifestyle is changing rapidly and it influences the connection between family members is becoming a debatable issue in society these days. As far as I am concerned,
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 matter has both favourable and unfavourable effects, but the negative sides far outweigh the positive ones. On the one hand, it is hard to deny that
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 issue will bring some beneficial results.
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, it can be seen that most modern
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 tend to be more open-minded in educating
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, which leadS to a good understanding between
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 and
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. It is apparent that in the current developing society with advances in ways of thinking,
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 prefer making friends with their
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 to being a strict mother or father, and
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 breaks the barrier between
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. Another point to mention is that technological breakthroughs have changed our lives, the smartphone has been one of the greatest inventions of humans. It should not be forgotten that thanks to smartphones we can be connected to people anywhere, and overseas students can easily keep in touch with their family and friends.
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, despite these above desirable impacts, I am convinced that
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 issue has more distinctive drawbacks.
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, those who oppose it may maintain that the preference for the nuclear family
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 of an extended family expands the generation disparity. There is ample evidence to suggest that
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 in a nuclear family show less respect to the elders and find it difficult to harmony with them.The
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 point is that the abuse of smartphone or social networking sites in
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 and even adults make family life more monotonous.It is easy to see that family members spend less time talking to each other as they have their own world, WHICH is not a good APPROACH to building a happy family. In conclusion, considering the pros and cons of
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 matter, I am certain that the demerits are more prominent than the merits.
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