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Animal rights have become a topic of discussion for individual and government how far is animal testing and using for making food is justifiable . Agree or disagree.

All
animals
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 have the right to live in
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 world like humans. Nowadays
animals
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 are being used in different sectors for many purposes ,for
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reason
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 many
animals
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 have
extincted
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extinct
 from the world . I shall put forth my argument to support my view in the following paragraph.
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 of all ,
animals
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 are being used in
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 to produce medicine and for different kinds of experiments.
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 we
use
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 new drugs on
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the animal
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animal
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animals
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 because we can'
t
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use
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 new drugs on
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a human
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human
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humans
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 without knowing the side effects of the drug . We are using many
extincted
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extinct
animals
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 to experiment
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 harmful for these
animals
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 generation . We can
use
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 the simulation for our experiment .
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 ,
animals
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 are being used for producing different foods . Vegetarians opinion is that we shouldn'
t
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use
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animals
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 in our meals because we can get a lot of vitamin eating vegetables . Zoos are being used by
animals
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 for earning money . In my opinion , we shouldn'
t
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use
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animals
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 for our own benefit because we have no right to
use
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 them .
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 , some people opinions are that we can
use
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animals
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 for making food because they are below in our food chain . We don'
t
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 have advanced technology by which we can experiment . Our children can achieve many bits of knowledge by visiting zoos . To sum up , if there have a y alternative way without using
animals
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 we should follow that and we should save these
animals
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 from extinction .

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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