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Some people think that all universities should study whatever they like. Other they believe that they should only allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future. Such as those related to science and technology. Disscuss both side views and give your opinion

In
this
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 contemporary era , major varieties of
subjects
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 are available in
universities
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 for
students
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.
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 , one
skool
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school
 of thought
reccons
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reckons
 that every student is independent to choose his/her desirable subject. Indeed , some natives
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 that
universities
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 should only
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be allowed
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allowed
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allow
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 practical
subjects
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 related to
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science
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the science
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 and
technology
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 section which would be more beneficial in the future. The facts of the thesis will
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 with my personal opinion in the
followings
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 paragraphs. Nowadays ,
as
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apply
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every student has a wide
choices
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choice
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 of
subjects
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 whenever he/she joins university. It is necessary to provide
such
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 alternative
cources
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courses
sources
 according to different
education
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 fields. Because some
students
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 choose
study
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 due to
thier
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their
 personal interest
in
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particular
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a particular
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 subject.
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 , themes related to
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study
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the study
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 of humanities are likely to
more
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be more
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 interesting for some
students
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.
Therefore
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 , they only do
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study
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a study
the study
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 to gain knowledge
in
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particular
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a particular
the particular
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 field.
Hence
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 ,
students
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 should have
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a grant
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grant
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granted
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 to pick
cources
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courses
sources
 according to their
interest
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interests
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.
Moreover
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 , pressurising them to allow
study
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 only in
specific
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a specific
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 field can
results
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result
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 as
over burden
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overburden
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 and one can not able to focus on
study
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 more comfortably. On other hand ,
as
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apply
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some people
thinks
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think
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 it is important to
offering
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students
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 only futuristic
subjects
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such
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 as
science
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 and
technology
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 because it will be more helpful for them to make their future bright. It is generally known that nowadays the number of jobs related to
science
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 and
technology
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more
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is more
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 than other types of jobs. So to avoid the chances of scarce of unemployment ,
universities
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 should only allow
students
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 to do
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study
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a study
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 of practical
subjects
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 which help them to get better job opportunities in coming time.
In addition
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 , other
subject
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subjects
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such
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 as history and psychology are based on theories and it is
bieng
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being
 considered as
waste
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a waste
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 of time according to some experts and
subjects
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belongs
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belonging
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 to
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science
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the science
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 and
technology
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 sector are more practical.
Therefore
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 ,
universities
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 should focus on practical
subjects
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 rather than
theortical
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theoretical
subjects
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. In general ,
science
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 and
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technology related
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technology-related
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 courses has a wide role to help
students
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 in future but in my
opinion
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students
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 should have options to choose
subjects
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 related to
thier
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their
 own interest because it helps them to
performe
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perform
 better and more independently.

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