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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advances in technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Corruption is a fact of the human species. Where there is a human, there is a crime.
Furthermore
, As the world is moving towards modernization the ratio of violation is less as compared to the previous version of the world. So, I tend to go along with that hi-technology results in low cases of violation.
First
 and foremost, crime can be divided into two categories.
One
 is physical and the other is Online.For the physical violation, the modern technology used by an administration like in automobiles helps them to catch criminals within time.
Moreover
, we cannot ignore the role of cameras and computers which assist at the back end. Adding on, the devices used for communication by police are up-to-date.
This
 allows communication without distortion and delay.
For example
, Dubai is claimed to be
one
 of the safest cities because of the hi-tech devices being used by their patrol department. These include the fastest cars like Ferrari, Lamborghini and many more to catch criminals.
Secondly
, the
next
 category is online robbery which includes money theft, data stealing and most of the important is hacking house surveillance devices. Money is transferred to another account or someone buys something online through a credit card. So, to prevent many codes having strong firewalls which are unable to access are being used. And
this
 is because of the modernization in computers.
For example
, blackberry phones are considered
one
 of the most protective phones because of the high-end security insured by them. Bringing
this
 to an end, I reiterate that computerization has solved many of our problems and reducing the crime rate is
one
 of them.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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