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some people think government should invest more money in teaching science than others subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #government #money #science #subjects #country #progress
In today's modern world,
technology
 has become the most important part of our
life
. Our daily routine has become dependent on
technology
. It has become so important that we have forgotten about the other important things which can help our
country
 to a development stage. In my opinion, we should give equal importance to every subject, be it
science
 or geography or any other in order to excel. Obviously, without
science
, we cannot think about surviving our
life
 but we should not be dependent on them as they may make us lazy to do our daily job. The
country
 should develop and progress not just because of
technology
 but
also
 because of culture, economy, upgrading and maintaining the precious art forms.
For example
, building museums where our artists can showcase their unique talents in front of others, will boost their confidence and
also
 will help in making a positive contribution to the economy. The livelihood of citizens cannot depend on just
science
. People have their own passion and they want to live their
life
 in their own way. One should not just depend his
life
 only on
technology
. The development and the progress will happen only when we all contribute to bringing a positive and healthy environment towards our surroundings. People should focus only on what they are good and that will help the
country
 to move ahead when compared to others. If everyone helps each other in overcoming the weaknesses and brings out positivity in each other, it will help the
country
 in a broad manner. To conclude, I want to say that
science
 may be important in today's competitive world but it is not the only thing that can make a
country
 in developing stage. There are other aspects and other subjects other than
science
 which can be a game-changer for the people. And once they come to know about other subjects importance, the
country
 will totally move ahead.
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