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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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There are few people who believe that the
students
 of the university can take their
subjects
 whatever they like as their own
choice
in contrast
 others regard that
students
 should allow choosing their
subjects
 with regard to science and technology which will be benefited for the future.
However
, in spite of raising controversial
issues
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 I recommend those
subjects
 which should be taken by the
students
 in order to select independently so that they can build up their skills and contribute to the country as well as society freely by their own through individual competency based on their efficiency which can be developed by their own through the discussion above topic has both views.
Moreover
, different
students
 have different choices and people vary in their skills and taste. Provided that we force a student to take his subject and if he has no own
choice
, he/ she can fail to contribute and
also
 lag behind.
For instance
, some guardians compel their children to take their educational subject
choice
such
 as forcing them to be doctors and engineers but mostly they fail and can't achieve their goals.
On the other hand
,
students
 who have their own
choice
 to choose their
subjects
 are more creative than any other
students
 who are obliged to get their
subjects
 to have no independence to select their own subject. To be balanced all are keeping contribution for the sake of welfare from their particular position and situation. In
this
 ,circumstance
students
 should have rights and we should not force them to be obstacles to emerge and apply their own innovation and cognitive power which are the behind scene to be development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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