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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Parents and scientists have been discussing
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 issue of separate or mixed
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schools
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 and
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 since schools
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themselves
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 appeared. I hope in modern times that intelligent people
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 of the importance of that question. A lot of people want to know how schools formation
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on
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identity development and
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education quality. The
folowers
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followers
 of the separate study claim that
boys
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 have
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view
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 the world.
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 why we need to give them
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 educational
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. It would be developing both
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 natural qualities in a better way. On the
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genders
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 specialities
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 a religious look on the world. God created man and women to be different and it is against God`s will
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. The other part of the society has another opinion and considers mixed school as a preferable form of education. Pupils of both
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 take benefits from
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interaction with each other as they explore another
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way of
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.
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, students are preparing
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 future family life communicating to
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opposite sex. Five grades I attended a special football class of a school where there were no
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. We behaved ourselves in
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 boyish manner, talked tough and often
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. As soon as I am concerned, we felt
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 of
girl`s
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girls'
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 calmness and mildness and when they were included in the class` list we
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 relieved and became kinder and more well-balanced. For
me
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 personally separate study does not allow
boys
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learning
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 essential things about opposite sex way of thinking and
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 decreases
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 of the identity. In my humble opinion, dividing
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 and
girls
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shools
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not
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 only
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medieval
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 way of organizing education but an evil that seriously diminishes people`s chances to understand each other.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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