Your English teacher has found a new penfriend for you. Write a letter to the penfriend and introduce yourself. Tell them what you like doing in your free time. Ask your penfriend to tell you about their hobbies and interests.

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Dear Sarah, I'm writing

this

letter because my English teacher

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Oliveira, has told me that you, like me, love to write letters and he thinks we could be friends. When he said it, I was so excited because nowadays, it is hard to find a penfriend. Let me introduce myself, my name is Raquel, I'm 19. I've been living here, in New York, since the college in account starts, so there are no more than four months. Before that, I only lived in Brazil and

this

is my

first

experience in a foreign country. I share an apartment with a Chinese girl, who

also

studies accountancy but in a different period than me. As I have no friends in

this

city yet, in my spare time I enjoy watching TV, making video calls to my family, and

also

cooking my own meal. I love carrot cake and pasta. I must confess that living away from my family has been a challenge. I have some curiosity about you, so please, tell me about you, whom do you live with? what do you like to do in your free time? And how frequently do you think we can exchange letters? I hope to hear from you soon. With love, Raquel.

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You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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209 words

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Your English teacher has found a new penfriend for you. Write a letter to the penfriend and introduce yourself. Tell them what you like doing in your free time. Ask your penfriend to tell you about their hobbies and interests.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

It is important for people to risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?

People have different jo exception for jobs. Some people prefer to do same job for same company, whereas other prefer to change jobs frequently. Write advantages and disadvantages of each view point.

Because of traffic and housing problems in the cities, the government encourages business to move to the rural area. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.