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You have lost an item of value on a train. Write a letter to the railway company. In your letter, -Describe the item -Explain where and when you left it -Say what action you would like the company to take

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Dear Sir, I am writing to you about an item, which was a possible theft from your rail Padma 987
last
 week while I was visiting Dhaka. My missing item is my recently purchased mobile handset, which was a black coloured rectangular shaped LG cell and the Model No was PG487. It has a state-of-the-art face lock security feature, which can identify its owner with artificial intelligence technology. About the incident, during my visit
last
 week particularly in the Sirajgong Station, I went to the toilet
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 and left my phone on top of my luggage. After my return, I could not find it, and my front seat passenger was not in his seat as well, who was a young man.
Therefore
, I am requesting an investigation from your closed-circuit camera record, which could assist me to identify the thief and his punishment regarding
this
 crime. I am awaiting your response. Yours faithfully, Ryan Smith
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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