You are applying to have a job as sa caregiver. Describe the reason why you think you are worthy to be hired

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Dear Sir/ Madam My name is Ann ( Do Thi Hang Nga), I am searching for a
part time
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job as a
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caregiver
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care giver
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in Christchurch. After having my
first
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baby
last
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year, I have decided to change my career as a chef to be a caregiver. With the passion of helping others, patience and taking good
care
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, I believe that I can contribute my value…..
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I am trying my best to create my future career in health
care
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, I even prepared to
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to
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the Master of Nursing Science course at Otago University in
Chrsitchurch
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Christchurch
from
Februay
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February
2022. Most of my bosses that I worked with before were very happy with my performance at work, due to my
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, responsible, honest and respectful attitude. After being working in New Zealand for more than 7 years with different jobs, from orchards to factories and hospitality, I gained the ability to adopt new skills quickly when starting working in any kind of job.
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, with the experience of taking
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my
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11
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old baby, I am confident to tackle
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the tasks at your rest home after
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training.Back
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Vietnam, I learned the value of helping people at an abbey for a year after graduating from University. My sister and one of my close
friend
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are working as a caregiver in
Chistchurch
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Christchurch
, so I understand most of the job characters at a rest home. I am living at Colwyn street, Bryndwr in Christchurch, so it is very close to your rest home. I hope that I can have a chance to
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care
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the elderly in my neighbourhood. If you need
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information from me, please let me know, it would be my pleasure to exchange more details with you
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your convenient time.
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