Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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According to many, both sexes
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require segregation of
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whereas others
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it.
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different types of
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.
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,
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sex institutions can contribute significantly and eliminate bias in
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male dominated
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professions. To initiate with, the religion and culture can play a big part to
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segregate
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for both sexes. Numerous Muslim countries separate their children
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schools
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due to religious and cultural reasons. In the United Arab Emirates,
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, kids are
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segregated
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due to religious binding according to the source of the daily newspaper Khaleej.
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,
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separation assists children to grow independently and
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themselves without any guidance.
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, these
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girls
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, especially, are learning typical subjects and not accepting the challenge of
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fields
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as physics, science, or any mathematical related subjects due to the religious
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, separation of
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is not assisting women to grow.
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, studying in mix sex
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, children’s are encouraged to grow equally. Without the bias of religion or culture, children will learn manners at the early stage of life, and
girls
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will be treated with respect.
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,
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will be encouraged to participate in challenging
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in
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fields;
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,
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are not still seeking challenging subjects in the real-life,
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they are attending mixed
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. Australia,
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, has recently produced their
first
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female surgeon to the world according to the source of ABC.
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, it is obvious that mixed
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in the developed world have not assisted female professionals to pursue careers in
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professions. To conclude,
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different-sex
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schools
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will not help women to pursue challenging professions.
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, mixed
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contribution is not influencing enough to grow women professionals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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