Write about the following topic. Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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viewpoint

would be that both sides

has

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a part to play in how

persons

decide to spend.

For the

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The

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first

viewpoint

where it suggests that advertising encourages useless spending can be true to some extent. Some advertising agencies make the products very appealing by exaggerating

its

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their

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usefulness and as well as

the

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apply

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price.

Therefore

persons

are always in a rush to purchase the item either because they think that they need it or the price is too appealing to let go.

However

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the other side would see it as some

persons

not being driven by the advertisement but just enjoy shopping. The other

viewpoint

where it suggests that advertisements actually tell

persons

about new products. I would agree to some extent due to the fact that through the advertisement

persons

get to find out about new ways to

improves

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improve

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lives and

lifstyles

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lifestyles

lifestyle

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, getting a new dishwasher

which

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that

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washes very clean without previous rinsing or purchasing an air fryer to decrease fatty intake.

Furthermore

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it can be suggested that these products may enhance the lives of individuals tremendously especially when working or

have

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having

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children.

However

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it can be suggested that why

replace

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to replace

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a good dishwasher when the old

does

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one does

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the same washing with a few added features.

This

is where it can be seen

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toas

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whether there is useless buying or improvement in life. I would say that both

viewpoint

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viewpoints

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brings forth their own opinion of advertising where I would agree with both to some extent.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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