Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is assumed that
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manager should decide for the issues lonely,
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others believe that staff should be involved. I will discuss
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To begin
with, in
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small
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company
it is acceptable to be handled by
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dean of the
company
; since one-person managing leads to fast
dicisions
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decisions
and mind mapping in order to achieve to
company
's goals and
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therefor
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,
this
development
overally
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will
be take
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place in
company
's benefits and values in a short period.
On the other hand
, by
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solely
managing in
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especially the short scaled one, one
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will destroy all the staff's attempts and
hard working
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;
for instance
, if the
company
be in an economical hardship when a group of people think about it carefully,
finally
the chances of
adressing
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addressing
this
issue will be increased.
Moreover
, people are socially connected to each other and they can get promotion in difficult situations by
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of each other and team working
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in working places is not the
excepetion
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exception
. To sum up, I consider that one person cannot develop and direct the whole
company
lonely, they managers should
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from consultations of staffs.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • top-down approach
  • hierarchical structure
  • grassroots level
  • strategic planning
  • on-the-ground experience
  • inclusive management
  • employee engagement
  • democratic process
  • transparency
  • cohesion
  • morale
  • practical insights
  • long-term goals
  • mutual respect
  • resistance to change
  • team dynamics
  • broader perspective
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