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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should take responsibility for it. Discuss both views, and give your own opinion.

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People
 are considered that the
government
 is liable for the
environment
's state, while there are others who think that every
person
 is responsible for protecting the
environment
. In my view, I believe that every human has to preserve the
Earth
 from litter, while global issues
such
 as industrial wastes and deforestation must be controlled by the
government
. On the one hand, due to owing a big set of economic resources the
government
 is responsible for preventing ecological disasters.
In other words
, the administration has all opportunities to create different recycling advanced systems based on cutting-edge technologies.
For instance
, the latest engineering's achievements enable
people
 to analyze in the air a number of harmful chemical compounds which decreases the air's quality.
Moreover
, the
government
 can introduce a law that bans factories from using machines polluting the
environment
.
Thus
, many ecological problems can be solved by the
government
.
On the other hand
, every
person
 takes responsibility for preserving the
Earth
 for the
next
 generations because a human being realizes the importance of saving the
environment
.
In contrast
 with monkeys who are not conscious,
people
 are able to do everything to continue the human genus as possible. If humanity had not gotten an intellect,
people
 as species would have died out. For
this
 reason, it is necessary to be not an apathetic
person
 to the
environment
's state. To summarize, due to the evolution
people
 have to take of the
Earth
. In my opinion, the
government
 should think about only world ecological problems, while an individual should support the condition of nature locally. It means that acting alone a
person
 could not protect the
Earth
 from global warming as well as land degradation.
However
, the
government
 can preserve these problems in a much more effective way. To reiterate, the
government
 and an individual are both responsible for the
environment
.
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