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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expansive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

#food #drink #products #levels #sugar #health #people
These days, food and
beverage
 manufacturing is one of the most important factors in parts of
country’s
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 developments.
From
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 my opinion,
disagreement
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the disagreement
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 of increasing
a
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the
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price
 of sugary products encourage people to consume less
sugar
 outweigh its agreement because of export and money. The
first
 reason
that
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is that
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 it is an impact
to
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on to
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 export business. Some countries where are a majority of
beverage
product
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products
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 as soft
drink
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drinks
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 or juice are receiving a lot of money exported the
drink
 that
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use
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 a lot of
sugar
 as an ingredient. The
increasing
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 of sugary goods will be affecting
this
 industry for sure.
For example
, Thailand is
the
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an
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 extraordinary important country to produce the juice and they sent it around the world. All countries prefer to import juices from Thailand because of reasonable
price
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prices
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 and good quality. In these years, the profit from
drink
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the drink
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 industry is decreasing more than
previous
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the previous
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 time (around 12 % of Compound Annual Growth Rate) because of
increasing
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the increasing
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 of cost
in
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apply
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each of goods.
This
 reason can cause to reduce a customer who usually
import
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imports
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drink
 products
form
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from
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 our country. The
second
 reason is money. The manufactured food and
drink
 products are so necessary for developing some
country
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countries
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. France is one of the most important places that can get a lot of income from selling alcoholic
beverage
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beverages
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, especially wine. The most significant process of making wine is fermentation fruits like grape or apple with
large
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a large
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 scale of
sugar
 around 6% of total volume. If they make more
expansive
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expensive
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 of
main
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the main
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 ingredient, it will be bad for them. Because a customer will
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be concern
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concern
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concerned
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 about
price
 before buying. In conclusion, adding a
price
 of
sugar
 is a bad idea to solve about consuming sweetened food or
beverage
. Because it can fall customers in the affair that can lead to decrease profit from selling the product.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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