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The world is in constant danger at loosing varieties of languages and cultures. This is due to similarities of lifestyles everywhere. Why it is such and what steps should be taken to stop it?

#world #danger #varieties #languages #cultures #similarities #lifestyles #steps
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Many cultures and
languages
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 are endangered and some have already
extincted
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extinct
. Globalization has shaped our lifestyle
uniformaly
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uniformly
,
eventually
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 we are going to lose our cultural authenticity unless we
intiated
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initiated
 a cultural salvage campaign . The world turned out to be a little
villege
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village
 , most people in different countries share almost the same way of living. The
white collar
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 dress code
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is
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designed for the in-office professions and the blue collars outfit is for manufacturing and
hands on
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 careers,
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the
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rules
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 now in the majority of the earth's geographic areas,
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 , there is no place for a traditional dress while running
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 new lifestyle.
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, English
now
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 the
language
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 of science and business, and in order to escalate in a job ladder mastering English is a must, eventually , new
genarations
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generations
generation
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a s
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as
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 the
first
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 spoken
language
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 at work and at home and no room
any more
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anymore
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 for the mother
language
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. The disappearing rate of archaic cultures and
languages
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 might be slowed down by teaching them at school. Young generations have to know about their cultural background and to learn their own authentic
languge
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language
languages
. Learning a
language
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, I believe, is the key to
know
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knowing
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 and
understand
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understanding
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 one's
cultur
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culture
 and to highly
appreciate
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appreciating
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 the traditions and
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 of the ancestors. The earlier we educate about authenticity and tradition the stronger the bonds with our cultural roots will be. In conclusion,
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languages
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 are on their way to vanish from
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 world blowing away
a
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apply
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precious cultures and
genuin
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genuine
 lifestyles,
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 drastic trend
migh
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might
 be rendered by starting a serious
campaings
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campaign
campaigns
 to teach old
languages
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 at early
ages
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age
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, and
hopefully
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 it will work efficiently.
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