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Purpose to visit to to five cities in the UK in 2013.

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The presented chart
given
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gives
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 data about the purpose to attended five
cities
 in the UK in 2013. As it observed in the bar chart, compared
percentage
 of visitors for some activities in the five UK
cities
 like
Birmingham
, London,
Edinburg
, Liverpool, Manchester. Now, turning to the details the chart showed that a high number of visitors preferred Holiday activity,
for example
, half in London and over 65
percentage
 in
Edinburg
. Only approximately 20 to 33
percent
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per cent
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 spent their holidays in Liverpool, Manchester,
Birmingham
. The
second
 purpose to visit it was business, nearly one-
third
 choose Manchester and a half attended
Birmingham
. It could be noticed that the least popular
cities
 in
Edinburg
 only 10
percent
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. The equal number of visitors had London and Liverpool roughly 18
percentage
. A visiting friend had borders between a fifth to nearly one-
third
percentage
 in all considerate
cities
. Small minority activities account for miscellaneous, in the bottom level in
Edinburg
 and
Birmingham
.
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