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It is often claimed that wealthy nations should provide financial support to poorer countries for welfare health and education. However, there are those who believe that it is the responsibility of developing nations to provide these services. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that along with globalization more and more
countries
 are connected to each other. Taking into account
this
 issue, some
people
 reckon that wealthy
countries
 should support the primary requirements of poor
countries
,
however
, others consider it as the responsibility of the developing nations. As far as I am concerned, the wellness and education of mankind should be the priority of all states and not only developed ones. Here, both views will be discussed. From one point of view, the Issues that each government encounters are their own responsibilities, and no one can solve these problems better than them.
Also
, the money which is allocated to help developed nations could spend on developing new technologies or medicines which could save all the
people
 around the globe. From another point of view, financial recessions become an undeniable fact that put too much pressure on
people
. In
this
 regard,
countries
 with better status can provide health facilities,
such
 as hospitals, medicines and so on.
Furthermore
, lack of sufficient education is one of the main problems which can lead to decreasing the quality of life.
Hence
, the establishment of schools in different areas where students easily have access to education could result in increasing living standards.
Last
 but not least, some diseases which may arise from poor
countries
 due to unhygienic lifestyle can have a negative impact on others so it is necessary that well-developed nations protect not only the citizens of that area but
also
 save the whole world. To put it in a nutshell, with respect to the whole views mentioned above, all
people
 have the right and dignity to live in
countries
 with better standards and
this
 could not happen without the help of rich states.
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