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the proportion of expenditure on food in three various find of food and trend of consumption of fast food between 1970 and 1990 in Britain.

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The given bar chart and line graph illustrate the information about the proportion of expenditure on
food
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 in three various find of
food
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 and trend of consumption of fast
food
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 between 1970 and 1990 in Britain. The general overview here is that
people
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 who had high and average
income
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 spent the most money on
hamburgers
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, while
people
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 with low
income
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 spent the highest on
fish
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 and
chips
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. And hamburger was the majority of fast
food
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 was consumed. According to the bar chart, it can be seen that
people
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 with high
income
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 expended on
hamburgers
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 the most, according to almost 45% per
week
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.
This
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figure
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 was significantly higher; almost one and a half times than that of
people
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 with low
income
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, where the average
income
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people
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 spent on
this
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 was around 33
%
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per
week
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.
Similarly
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, the high-
income
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people
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 spent the high on
pizza
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.
This
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figure
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 was followed by middle-salary
people
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, approximately 13% per
week
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 and low-salary
people
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, almost 10% per
week
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.
On the contrary
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,
fish
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 and
chips
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 were consumed by
people
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 with average
income
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 the most accounted for exactly 25%, followed by the low-
income
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people
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 with the
figure
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 almost 20% per
week
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, while high-
income
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people
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 spent the
last
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 at approximately 17% per
week
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. Turning to the line graph, in 1970,
fish
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 and
chips
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 indicated the highest
figure
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 for consumption, with the
figure
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 of exactly 300
Grammes
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, followed by
hamburgers
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 and
pizza
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 at almost 100
grammes
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 and around 40
grammes
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 respectively. After passing two decades, the number of
fish
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 and
chips
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 dropped gradually to just over 200
grammes
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.
On the other hand
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,
hamburgers
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 and
pizza
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 experienced an upward trend of consumption, with
hamburgers
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 reaching more than 500
grammes
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, making it was the majority of consumed fast
food
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 in 1990, and
pizza
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 dramatic rising to almost 300
grammes
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 in the same period.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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