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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#country #language
The development of transportation and technology
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 better and better. Many people in pursuit of
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 life, so
they
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move to
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 country or city to find a new opportunity. Actually,
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 not easy to suit of
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 environment and they will face some social problems when they migrate to a new nation. In my opinion, they use non-mother language to
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 in strange circumstances that could bring different problems of scale.
First
 of all, in social issue surfaces, when children started a new life in
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 nation that means they need to face some situation
such
 as meet new friends, new school and using
second
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 language, etc. These conditions are
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 challenge for them, and
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 could cause by cultural
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.
For instance
, new immigrants’ children were
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 by local students and affect their self-esteem. These reasons are
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 by they cannot speak English fluently or different social
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.
On the other hand
,
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practical
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 surface,
income
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 gap and job title could be limited since they are foreign people.
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, local
company
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companies
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 prefer hiring local citizens because they have
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same
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 background.
Besides
, some organizations just afford lower
salary
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 to new
immigrant
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immigrants
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 because they don’t put more resources or
times
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to
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 them. In conclusion, speaking a
second
 language in
other country
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that
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could
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 to some negative effects in social aspect when you as a new immigrant. People could bully
to
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your
kinds
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, or you have to accept an unfair payment with your job.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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