Some people think secondary school students should study international news as one of their subjects. Other people say this is a waste of valuable school time. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

In
this
modern world, it has become a debatable issue what subject should be added for adults in their studies.
As some
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people believe that, they should have to
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regarding global updates,
while
, others consider it completely useless. I will shed light on both these prospects
along with
my opinion. First of all, having global awareness is very crucial for the
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and it should be added to their courses.Because,
this
will help them to gain knowledge regarding every aspect
around
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the world and eventually, it will help them to grasp their knowledge.
For instance
, if youths will know all the happening around the world, they will learn so many things through
this
.
For example
, some will become good businessmen as they will know all the tricks or specific fields in which they will settle the business because of their information. So global news should be included for young
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.
On the other hand
, others disagree with
this
viewpoint. 'Teenage ' is the time period in which the new generation will choose their preferences regarding their interest in a particular subject and they already have so much burden of their studies; as most of them consider some of the subjects really tough
such
as Science and Math.
Thus
, adding one more subject particularly the one
that is
just a
wastage
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of time because they don't need to be aware of nature at a young age. In conclusion,
although
adding
earth news
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will consume some time for students
but
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I personally believe that it will enhance their knowledge and will develop a key to
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about all the happening on the whole
Earth
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global awareness
  • Critical thinking
  • Global citizenship
  • Cultural diversity
  • Communication skills
  • Historical context
  • World affairs
  • Academic subjects
  • Bias
  • Misinformation
  • Age-appropriate
  • Media literacy
  • Educational enrichment
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