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Because of the global economy, many goods including what we use as daily basics produced by other countries have to be transported for a long distance. To what extent do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Over the past few years, due to the global economy,
goods
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 which we use daily produced by foreign countries are being transported for a long distance. There are advantages to
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,
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, I believe the cons of
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 situation outweigh the pros.
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 and foremost, importing
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 from long distances has its own good sides. More new
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 which are not available in most countries can be introduced to the local market.
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, there are certain types of fruits that are rare, like berries and these are only available in countries with cold weather.
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, by purchasing international
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, the global markets are being expanded,
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, more and more business partners are being produced. Yet, the pros do not seem to be a dominating factor.
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, there are a couple of disadvantages of transporting items from outside for a long distance.
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, growing numbers of foreign
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 in a country affects the local brands.
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, the business markets become highly competitive. To illustrate
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, local
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 as soaps and detergents are produced locally in a vast amount.
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, stores and markets with high reputations prefer to import foreign brands considering the quality of the
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.
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, transporting
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 from distant causes surge in air traffic and pollution.
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, the number of flights and trucks that are used to import and transfer increases and cause more air pollution which is catastrophic to the environment. To conclude, there are advantages of transporting
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 from another region for a long distance which contributes to the country’s development. In spite of that, the negative sides outweigh the positive sides.
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, authorities of a country should consider producing more local
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 to fulfil the demand of the market.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global economy
  • Consumer choice
  • Economic benefits
  • Job creation
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • Infrastructure
  • Standard of living
  • Cost efficiencies
  • Raw materials
  • Production processes
  • Specialization
  • Environmental impact
  • Carbon emissions
  • Pollution
  • Supply chain disruptions
  • Local industries
  • Cultural dilution
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