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The government should take responsibility for their actions to the environment. To what extent do you agree?

#government #responsibility #actions #environment
We vote a certain ideology to the power thinking that they will deliver on the promises that they have made.
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environmental issues is
one
such
 task in any state's progress card. They should be held accountable for any damage caused to
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mother earth due to their policy decisions. At the same time, it is equally important to acknowledge any goof effort on their part to save our planet. Government is a set of ministers from various local areas, elected by the population, to achieve some goals. These representatives are expected to have sound knowledge of all the general issues and
environment
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 is
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 of those.
One
 must keep nature as the
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 idea before making any regulation. They must make sure that the decisions being made are not going to have an adverse effect on the earth. We are at a stage where any
further
 damage to the earth is going to have a
long lasting
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 impact and can make
this
 planet, not a suitable place to live, for generations to come. It is important even for us to make sure that
current
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 population actively participates in any environmental drive for the sake of
next
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one
's. We can not pass on the buck to local bodies by saying that we have selected them to make important decisions and now it is their sole duty to take care of impacts on
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nature.
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, I do not fully agree
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 the view that the government should take
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full responsibility for their actions
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 the environment. According to
me
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, it should be a shared responsibility between politicians and
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normal people.
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