Many young people today know more about international pop or movie stars than they do about famous people from their country's history. Why is this? What can be done to get young people interested in famous figures in their country's history

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Today's young
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are often more interested in international celebrities than in the historical figures of their country. In my opinion,
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is a consequence of the mass media and
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the harm of social networking sites. Fortunately, we still have many ways to engage young
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learning
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. Young
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are often attracted to individuals they are famous for in the entertainment industry,
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as movies, music, games. We have many reasons to explain
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, today's life is too busy and full of difficulties, which will make young
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often look to the entertainment industry to help them relieve stress.
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, the advertising campaign is so good that the image of the
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of
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is blurred.
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, we can easily find the biography of a famous artist or actor,
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of finding out the background of historical figures. In fact, we have many solutions to attract young
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to historical figures. For the government, they need to build more museums or open more activities for young
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related to
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. Not only that, cutting their working hours so that they have more time to learn and improve themselves. With family, try to slow down, spend more time together,
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learn about your loved ones, to review old memories.
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not only ties the whole family together
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but
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attracts young
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to study
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. In short, paying too much attention to today's celebrities is
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not good for young
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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