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Many young people today know more about international pop or movie stars than they do about famous people from their country's history. Why is this? What can be done to get young people interested in famous figures in their country's history

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Today's young
people
 are often more interested in international celebrities than in the historical figures of their country. In my opinion,
this
 is a consequence of the mass media and
this
 is
also
 the harm of social networking sites. Fortunately, we still have many ways to engage young
people
about
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 learning
history
. Young
people
 are often attracted to individuals they are famous for in the entertainment industry,
such
 as movies, music, games. We have many reasons to explain
this
.
Firstly
, today's life is too busy and full of difficulties, which will make young
people
 often look to the entertainment industry to help them relieve stress.
Second
, the advertising campaign is so good that the image of the
people
 of
history
 is blurred.
For example
, we can easily find the biography of a famous artist or actor,
instead
 of finding out the background of historical figures. In fact, we have many solutions to attract young
people
 to historical figures. For the government, they need to build more museums or open more activities for young
people
 related to
history
. Not only that, cutting their working hours so that they have more time to learn and improve themselves. With family, try to slow down, spend more time together,
to
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learn about your loved ones, to review old memories.
This
 not only ties the whole family together
,
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 but
also
 attracts young
people
 to study
history
. In short, paying too much attention to today's celebrities is
also
 not good for young
people
,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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