Some people believe that children in schools should learn how advertisements motivate us to buy things. Do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion.

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Nowadays, more and more
people
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start to find out, that commercial affects their mind more than ould be imagined. Thanks to it, more and more
people
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begin to consider that schools should pay more attention to giving that information to children in order to help young
people
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avoid advertisement detrimental influence. True it or false, I will try to discuss in
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, I would notice that exactly business is the main taxpayer in the current economical and political model of the state which is followed by most countries in the world. In the modern world success of any business depends on appropriate market placement
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determined by reasonable advertisement. And in the free market
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only business which applies aggressive marketing technologies is able to succeed and has won in the commercial contest. Including techniques that affect the human psyche in order to force them in buying certain goods or services.
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, amount of
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on Earth increasingly rises. In my opinion In conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuasion
  • consumerism
  • brand awareness
  • manipulative techniques
  • subliminal messaging
  • materialism
  • impulse buying
  • psychological triggers
  • advertisement deconstruction
  • media savvy
  • ethical advertising
  • targeted advertising
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