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In the future, all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless . The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you Think the advantage of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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These days, there are many driverless vehicles and
people
 try to develop
this
 technology . so automatic car will increase and a lot of drivers prefer
this
 way in automatic. I’m sure there are pros and cons, but I think advantages far outweigh disadvantages The main benefit is that automatic
cars
 can help reduce accidents and improve the
quility
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quality
 of life. In self-driving
cars
, computers control traffic laws and signals and
people
 don’t drive themselves so accidents caused by drinking or fatigue will gradually disappear and drivers will be able to relax since they can use free leisure time
such
 as rest, personal work, meals.
In addition
, even the
people
 who
disadvantaged
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 and had difficulty driving for many reasons will be able to drive and access to driving will be increased. ,
However
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 there are definitely drawbacks. If there is a problem with the system, it can cause accidents
such
 as rapid acceleration, sudden stop. and when
people
 buy automatic
cars
, they can’t purchase
it
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them
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 easily due to the expensive price. But in ,
conclusion
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the conclusion
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 I believe that the positives of driverless vehicles outweigh the negatives. Self-driving
cars
 will develop in a better system and there will be many low priced
cars
.
People
 will prefer
this
 convenience by
self-driving
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a self-driving
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car
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cars
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.
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