Some people think that in the modern world we are more dependent on each other while other think that people have become more independent.discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Modernity

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has changed the

world

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since the

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decades and with

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society's have transformed.

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people

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's interactions

has

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became

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weaker, resulting in more independent persons. Along with

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this

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changes in relationship

behavior

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, technology has

became

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stronger causing effects in

modernity

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interrelations.

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, is important to mention that some decades before

families

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around the

world

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were bigger, making

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connection between individuals stronger because

families

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were more band together, sharing same interests, routines, place of living and jobs. Nowadays,

families

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usually have fewer kids and their housing belongs related to their jobs making

families

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apart. According to a Harvard study, since 2000 it was

demostrated

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demonstrated

that

families

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have many members living abroad or in a different city from their parents,

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this

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kind of distance develop on

people

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autonomy and independence.

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, is impossible to avoid that technological growth has parted society's, because

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innovation

allow

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connections with

people

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all around the

world

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, consuming the attention that at

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was given to a local place and now it is focused globally, making individuals apart because of their interests.

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, there are some

people

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that disagree with it and support that

modernity

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has

delevoped

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developed

more dependency between persons, claiming that

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societies

society

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have become more globalized,

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they are more linked between them at economic, political and cultural issues. A clear example is the actual

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apply

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the performance of economy between countries, in the Colombian case we are dependent

from

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China's economy. Making

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country conditional on what happens on the other side of the

world

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hilghlighting

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highlighting

different point of

views

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view

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on the evolution of dependency in relations, I consider that

definetly

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definitely

modernity

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have

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made

people

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more independent as how it was decades ago. Making

families

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and groups apart, caused at

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because of the technology innovations we have had.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

interdependence
globalization
technological advancements
collective action
digital evolution
minimal reliance
direct interaction
empowered
access to technology
societal expectations
personal choice
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