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International travel sometimes makes people prejudiced rather than broad minded. What may be the reasons for this? What can people do to improve their understanding of the countries they visit?

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International travel plays a
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 role not only
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 an individual's mental health but
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 in broadening one's Outlook . Sometimes there is
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 a probability of prejudiced the mind of individuals rather than broad
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's mind. Some reasons and improvements are
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 discussed . The
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 and foremost reason is that some countries have their own traditions and Customs which effects international tourism.
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, some Arab countries made a rule for women that it is essential to wear burkha . Every time when they go outside. Another reason is that when
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 goes to a slum area of a poor country like Algeria or Africa which are on
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 hunger index list of the world can not tolerate the feeling of
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 for the population of that country .
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 ,As to improve the understanding of the countries
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 visit awareness plays a major role . If any person goes for the International Tour
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 it's his responsibility to aware the people of that country .
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 should go to make a campaign that how an international traveller can broad and gain vast knowledge as well as understanding. In conclusion, by keeping the best methods and tour guide oneself can broad their Mind by the internationally travelling.
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