Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Perspectives of the main environmental problem are varied between
people
. Some
people
believe it is the loss of particular species of plants and
animals
. Others argue that there are some important environmental
problems
. Nowadays, environmental
problems
are the most important subject in the whole world,
people
must take it very
serious
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and try to improve our environment,
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what ever
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they believe
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is the main reason. Some
people
believe cutting trees and not saving forests from burning out is the biggest problem for
environment
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the environment
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, that we should keep those forests, cause threes are helping and improving air quality.
Also
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some
animals
are becoming extinct and by losing
animals
we will
loss
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will lose
the
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nature and the benefits of those
animals
.
However
, I believe the essential environmental
problems
are the
extremely
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use of plastic and the shortage of water,
that
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is causing
a
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global warming, and we can tell by the surprising changes in the weather.
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, some places are becoming very dry, some having serious floods.
Also
in the future, there will be not enough water to drink or to use in producing food and essential product for
living
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. In conclusion, I think that the whole world must consider environmental
problems
especially global warming, and
to
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deal with
it
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very
serious
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.
People
should invest and help
improving
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our world to a better life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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