The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what solutions can you suggest?

The
Internet
has played a major role in educating people and spreading awareness among the elderly and youth of today's world,
therefore
have transformed the way of communication majorly. Sharing intelligence with a mass audience is very easy these days with the help of the
internet
. Be it useful information advice or the content irrelevant for most population,
Internet
has shared everything we see around us today. To start with the most prominent problem with the
internet
is the privacy of individuals, private associations and government bodies. Social networking sites have intervened in the life of many celebrities which sometimes they do intentionally but sometimes it spreads without any reason and expose a lot much data to an irrelevant audience.
Similarly
, for the private party, any legal or private issues happening within the group are visible to so many folk around the world which deplete the community image among family and affect their share market price.
Furthermore
, the youth of the world is exposed to everything around them which diverts them in the wrong direction many times. The earlier minority was having access to authentic, informative and relevant clues from books and magazines. But nowadays the
internet
has provided a lot
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irrelevant
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to teens which I believe is the most serious issue associated with
internet
users these days.
Moreover
, the kids in today's era have more inclination towards indoor activities than having physical outdoor activities, which in turn makes them active physically. As per my opinion,I would suggest limiting the access to advice communicated through the
internet
within the minority, kids and the group. Should impose strict laws and policies on social media websites and application owners.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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