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The picture given shows the manufacturing process of bricks. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

#picture #process #bricks #information #features #comparisons
The linear
process
 chart illustrates
that
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the
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 various seven steps
occurring
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occur
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 in
production
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the production
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process
 of
bricks
 , the seven steps are digging
clay
 , separating the metal grid, producing
bricks
, heating , cooling , packaging and delivering . the chart depicts that
process
 is starting with
digging
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the digging
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 of
clay
 and ending with packaging and delivering the product the produced
bricks
 are heated at a particular temperature to attend the
last
 stage of
process
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the process
a process
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that is
 delivering the
bricks
 to market. By using the machinery the
clay
 is
digged
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dug
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 out and the metal grids are crunched with the help of
roller
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a roller
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.consistently,with
suffetient
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sufficient
 amount of sand and water are added to the
grinded
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ground
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clay
.
bricks
 can be extracted by two methods they are by moulding the
clay
 into
required
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the required
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 shape and using
wire
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a wire
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 cutter to cut the
bricks
 into
desired
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the desired
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 shape. The moulded
bricks
 are kept into an
advance
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 machinery
that is
 drying oven for
couple
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a couple
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 of days after that they are heated at a moderate to high temperature of 200 degrees to 1300 degrees celsius and consistently for 2 to 3 days they are kept under
cooling
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the cooling
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 chamber and the product is packed and delivered.
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