Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

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are buying their kids an ample amount of play
toys
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to have
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fun. Significantly,
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up to
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, they are very helpful to improve their visual and mental abilities. The essay will
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discuss the merits and demerits
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giving plenty of play
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to
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. It is psychologically proved by doctors that,
children
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who are
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between
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1 to 4 years of
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are with
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. They learn everything by their own experience.
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, if their
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told them not to touch hot water , they wish to go and touch them to know what's there in it. So, it is a definite advantage to give ample amount of
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for
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particular period of
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to gain knowledge and increase their mental ability. Significantly, there are chances of disadvantages.
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, playing with
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for a particular amount of time totally depends on
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mind set
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mindset
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of the
children
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and control over
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, giving plenty of
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to
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may get disturb their working mood because gradually, they are very
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interested
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playing than sitting in a constant place and studying for exams.
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been done in 2021 depicts that kids having less
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are not eager about their future despite they are very
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interested
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to watch movies, cartoons and have fun with their neighbours in
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the playing
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area. So, I conclude that the above passage illustrates advantages as well as disadvantages. I suggest that
parents
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should find their
children
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ability
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the ability
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of grasping
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new things and giving
toys
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according to their
age
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,
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is a new app called
dujo
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dojo
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panda, it is an app where they provide
toys
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and books for 9months to 8 years
children
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. They ask
parents
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to fill a form which
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basic questions about child abilities, according to
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they will send books and
toys
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to improve their reading and mental ability from childhood itself.
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kind of
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toys
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improve their knowledge but they cannot be
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an distractors
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