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Some say that it would be better if the majority of employees worked from home instead of travelling to a workplace everyday. Do you think the disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

#say #majority #employees #home #workplace
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Advancement in technology has made
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 easy because
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that
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people
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 can
work
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 anywhere.
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, it is sometimes thought working from
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 is better than to go at the office, others believe that
employees
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 should go
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 the workplace. In my
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 I considered that there are both positives and
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negative
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 effects. There are several reasons why it is good for
employees
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 to
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 from
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. The
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 and foremost important thing is that saving
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. Workers do not need to travel for
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, so they can save
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 for themselves and family.
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,
people
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 can do more than one
work
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 at a
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 through the internet.
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, it provides tremendous benefits. Another point to consider is that working from
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 is better for
employees
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 means that they have a chance to
work
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 in any corner of the world.
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, in one survey has conducted in the UK,
people
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 are choosing to
work
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 abroad and they need to go there, but working from
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 has given an option to
employees
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 to
work
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 in foreign without travelling.
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, there are many applications available online, they can
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 from those applications
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 of travelling to a workplace.
On the other hand
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, working from
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 has some demerits
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.
Firstly
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,
people
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 do not
work
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 on
time
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, as employers are not present with them to look after their
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.
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, workers can not understand their colleagues when they are working in a team, because they never meet them.
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, employers can not see
employees
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 expression and seriousness online for their
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. In conclusion, working from
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 has numerous advantages
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 as spending quality of
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 with family and can do
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 any part of their country, not even in their country but across the world. While there are some
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 disadvantages and it should not neglect.
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