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Divorce rates and family breakdowns are increasing globally, it is generally accepted that families today are not as close as they used to be. Discuss the causes of this problem and offer some possible solutions to it.

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days
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division
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the division
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 of families and
divorce
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 rates are increasing day by day because of
lack
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a lack
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 of understanding and closeness. In
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i
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 will discuss
about
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the problems
behined
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behind
 it and offer some possible solutions to
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them
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. In olden
days
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 they use to stay in
a
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apply
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joint families , which teach emotions,
effections
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affections
effects
 and how to mingle with
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 other but unfortunately because of repercussions like professional and instant
life style
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now a
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days
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 everyone
are considerably tend
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 to be in a nuclear family. Significantly, their main reason for
divorce
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 is misunderstandings, work pressure and in recent
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, In society women are warm welcome to work
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 as men for 8 to 12 hours a day. So, lack of managing works and responsibilities at home is
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a
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 main reason for quarrels. I clearly describe the solution's to avoid
divorce
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 is to take advice from adults who can understand
situation
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 far better and give
a considerable advice
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considerable advice
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 and
one
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 should make sure not to repeat same mistakes in their marital life, as well as
one
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 should give importance to their partner feelings and making sure that he or she is maintaining only
one
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 family than
maintaing
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maintaining
maintain
 two families. so, that they can lead
effectionated
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affectionate
affectionately
 life and mostly avoid issues which cause
to
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divorce
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. To conclude, people themselves will have to
reliase
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release
realise
 the importance of family lifestyle and they should have indeed corporation between
one
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 other at hard times and I predict that
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 issues would not
be impact
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 on children. so, that future generations might lead a prosperous lifestyle.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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