Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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In the contemporary era, where
people
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can afford to live wherever they want without any borders matter, some
still
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afraid of leaving their comfort zone for logical reasons.
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, there are pros and cons of
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way
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of thinking, and in
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underlying factors will be focused on two main areas. Perhaps,
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of the causes of the affair to explore opportunities to live somewhere else is that circumstances nowadays are not stable, meaning that taking risks
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not always ends
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. To illustrate, the famous influencer Aliya Baitugayeva counts as rolling in the money
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here in Kazakhstan, she loves to travel, but she afraid to leave overseas or even another city, due to unknown would be level of living abroad be the same as here.
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pattern appears to be global, with the result that
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level of wealthy
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is very low.
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, another issue is
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mentalities barrier, where
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person
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a person
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from
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region is not understood by other region
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.
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,
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of
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South Kazakhstan appreciate those who
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the West, due to the reason that despite the same nation “Kazakh”, traditions and even language is different, especially the manners.
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why most
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people
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the people
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from both sides do not really desire to change their location. Regarding potential advantages, probably the obvious
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would be a great knowledge of the city. To be more precise,
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person
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the person
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who lived in the area whole his life knows every corner of it, the best
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view point
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, the delicious café or shop with
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discounts.
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,
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to try or visit something new might bore human
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, and it will result
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depression and anxiety.
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, another possible privilege may be tight bonds with family and
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relatives. Where
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help from aunt to look after
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a child
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will be for free and pleasant rather than spending budget on professional nanny with the treat of her attitude towards the infant.
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, if
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person
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a person
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prefers introverted life, where she enjoys her private territory, annoying relatives could be a big disaster to it, and
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one
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way to get rid of it is to move to another city or even country. To conclude, it is evident that there are a lot of the reasons why
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majority of
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choose to not go out of their comfort
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,
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as confidence
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the future and
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surroundings, and all the positives and negatives of that choice are well known by those
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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