It is said that people should retire early, others argue that it is unnecessary to do so. Discuss both views.

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To begin
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with, an average person has to
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40 hours a week with stacks of paper and assignments on their desk, and only after retirement can they have a rest and relaxation .
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is the majority of most office
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, and sometimes even in higher positions when they continuously bury themselves in
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and deadlines given by their superior manager and the loop does not end until they get a promotion. In most
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cases, they do not have the guts to quit and get another job more capable for them and keep wasting
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on things they do not enjoy.
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, a few hours every night or the weekend is not enough for trips to remote places, where most
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would want to spend their
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after all the
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and stress in order to reward themselves. After a long day of
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, anyone would love to spend the night with their family,
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, doing it eventually will get them bored and unsatisfied. So in order to spice things up,
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tend to go on vacation to get fresh air from other places but it is usually available only when they are given permission to or on bank holidays are they free to do so.
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, by not going to
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and having
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things to worry about in our spare
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, it is
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that we have more
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with our family and friends.
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, there are already too many movies that give us the consequences of not spending enough
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with their children and they are likely to be spoiled and disrespectful towards others, including elders.
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, the parents are not young either, it is a child’s responsibility to look after their parents and they have to
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it thoroughly.
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, everyone complains about how their life is full of stress and
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and seek for more
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free time
, but what if when they actually have it,
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take it for granted and get bored
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.
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problem occurs to everyone and very frequently, especially when some
people
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do not seem to understand exactly what they are doing and what they really want.
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, when they see a beautiful but expensive dress, all they think of is how charming it is and the other’s attention towards them wearing it while it can barely look properly good on them. What is more, a common difficulty for elders is that when they do not have a job, they can not easily afford for their
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with all kinds of spendings and taxes. It is widely known that it is not possible to live entirely on pension, it only serves as a small amount of money to help them in a few aspects in later days of their life and they have to count on their savings as well as their children looking after them.
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, everyone has to think twice before they start spending money after retirement in order not to go bankrupt and get themselves in debt.
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but not least, it is compassionate that seniors with a lot of experience can no longer
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anymore.
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who have been working for years must have a decent knowledge about the most proper ways to finish their
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but are not capable of devoting more. Some of them did not even have the chance to help
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it easier for others by instructing newbies or
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devices and methods to get the
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done more effortlessly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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